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With every sentence you don't say
Every question
Every effort
Unanswered
Unknown
Another pile of bricks
Cemented together by your silence
Wet by my tears
On the outside
You do not see
The brick wall you have around me
It's one dead end after the next
But it seems
Not dead enough
And as I sit in the circle
You made for the night
I cry
Unheard
Unanswered
Unknown.
©2007-2009 ~Beckieflitz
:iconbeckieflitz:

Author's Comments

These walls are frustrating and I'm tired of trying to break them down. Just bloody leave me there to rot then, I don't care any more.
Not directed at anyone on here. x

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:iconpumpkinhead1:
I love it!
I want you to know, that I feel completely the same as you...
It reminds me somehow "The Wall".

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Everybody tie your shoes CLAP CLAP!
Everybody tie your shoes CLAP CLAP!
Everybody tie your shoes, Everybody tie your shoes, Everybody tie your shoes CLAP CLAP!
:iconscottdeviantholley:
If you keep writing poems like this im going to have to seriously consider changing my favourite poet to you, i read this like 5 times, its amazing.

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You dun know.
:iconbeckieflitz:
As in Pink Floyd's the wall?
Oof. Scary film that.
Glad you like it.
Just sick of trying to please people, it's like no matter how hard I try I can't do anything right. xx

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The scrawlings of an idiot. :boing:
:iconmrmemail:
Use a metaphorical (or a real if you want) sledgehammer. And a good last 3 poems by the way.
:iconbeckieflitz:
You really think so? Gosh. Thanks. Personally I think it's a bit.. well.. shit. xx

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The scrawlings of an idiot. :boing:
:iconbeckieflitz:
Thanks. And I wish I could. xx

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The scrawlings of an idiot. :boing:
:iconscottdeviantholley:
Lol i definately wouldnt call it that :) what dont u like about it?

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You dun know.
:iconbeckieflitz:
I dunno, I just don't like it. It just doesn't show any talent, I don't think.. I dunno. Maybe I'm just in a pessimistic mood. xx

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The scrawlings of an idiot. :boing:
:iconpumpkinhead1:
I feel like reading my own words...Really..
Thank you, good to know I'm not alone..

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Everybody tie your shoes CLAP CLAP!
Everybody tie your shoes CLAP CLAP!
Everybody tie your shoes, Everybody tie your shoes, Everybody tie your shoes CLAP CLAP!

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