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I can see it etched onto your eyes,
Sewn into your mouth and swirling
Around that serpent’s tongue,
It folds into your ears, and penetrates my mind.
It stays there, circling,
Those black clouds I know all too well,
Fogging my mind and leaving me screaming
A smoky, silent scream
Splintering every thought
Every breath deemed futile.
I know that you’re feeling it
It’s obvious, though you deny it
That stench of horrified emotions
Shattering the panes of glass behind my wall,
You’re disappointed in me again,
Aren’t you.
©2009 ~Beckieflitz
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Something I wrote when I was in college the other day.

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:iconparadox-meets-world:
This. Is. Fantastic! The feelings this shows along with the right use of words made this such a great piece! It gives a sense of connection, too. Like, readers, after reading this, will remember the words if ever they feel like they are disappointing someone. Fabulous work :).

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When the demons reach out for your soul, look them in the eye, and defy them. Respect them, but at the same time, be wary of their intents, and take heed these words, for someday they could be your last resort...
:iconbeckieflitz:
Wow, thank you!
I'm really glad you like it. :) It's very encouraging to get messages like this, thank you so much. xx

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The scrawlings of an idiot. :boing:
:iconparadox-meets-world:
Hey, not a problem. I'm a huge fan of good literature, and things that connect with my own life, and it definitely fit all the standards :D. It was really good.

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When the demons reach out for your soul, look them in the eye, and defy them. Respect them, but at the same time, be wary of their intents, and take heed these words, for someday they could be your last resort...

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